Awesome idea. I would strongly urge "fleshing" this out with some more details- more introduction details, maybe a scene where the poor barmaid has to deal with one of the drunk louts (instead of just telling about it).



Can't wait to read more!

Interesting idea but too much is told by the author rather than shown through action. It isn't believable; the characters do not act realistically, and no two-bit n'er-do-well would say “I know it was your male friend." surely? The story also ends a bit too abruptly, as will my review.

Reading a lot of books in my lifetime, I know a thing or two about liturature. Hehe, now, I may not be the best author in the world, but I am a bit of a critique when it comes to other people's works, so I'm sorry if I hurt your feeling, I'm just being honest.
The concept of the story is pretty good. I got the vibe of the whole good vs. evil going on, and the deception. Chrissie seemed like a likeable person, real if anything, and up to the angel-[art, the story could have been true.
I'm not, of course, saying the angel part of the story is dumb, but it makes te story that much more un-believable.
I do not know if you did it on purpose or not, but will say that, if it was an accident, go back and add commas, periods, and capital letters where they need to go, because for some readers, it can be very distracting.
I would say to definately finish the story, however, have an ending so that the story is somewhat-believable. I won't give you ideas, though, come up with them yourself ;) Four out of six stars.

This was a great read and I hope you add to it in the future!

I found this story intense and creepy, the writer has the gift and I cant wait to read more.

I'am gripped to say the least, right to my eyeballs.
I thirst for more to see if help will come for that damsel in distress, and the little I got left a quenching feeling of wanting more, so please tell me you do have a few more fab chapters to come? I can't wait for the conclusion so, I will stay tuned!