It is a very good book and I would recommend it to all my friends.

The book was very well written, but I'd have to reccommend that Mark Jeffrey italicize things a tad bit less :P

Lovely book!

I thought this was an exciting and fast-paced storyline. The characterisation and descriptions were excellent. I'll be looking out for more from this writer.

"What a great novel! This should be ranked 4th before Unfortunate Events, Narnia, and Harry Potter. I seek great things in the future for this book."

You should make a home made movie about it and sell it on lulu.

My Rating: It's Alright.

It was a fun story, but seemed antagonistic to faith and belief which was unneeded. It also could use some editing.

I found myself deeply egrossed in your book . What a mysterious and interesting story. I can't wait to read more. I give this a thumps up rating. Bravo!

Wonderful plot line, hats off to Mark for imagination and a very complex and layered plot. I would have loved to see more active writing with better verbs, less adverbs, better proofreading, less italics, better grammar, more showing, less telling, less stating the obvious, more subtlety and less author intrusiveness. It has a lot of potential though. If he works hard enough, he can sell these books well. Good job for a first draft though.
All the best in the future. Keep writing!
:)
Tommy

"How does it feel when the world stops? An amazing novel written By Jeffery" _Ahmed Alkhawaja, the youngest gulf obtaining th ICDL (International Computer Driving Licence)

Let me say at the outset that this is a very good story. I enjoyed it a lot.

I recognised his mythology as being based on Sitchin's wonderfully bizarre theories pretty quickly even though I haven't actually read his work. Which is fine they are a decent source of insiration and everyone needs that.

Yes definately interesting and exciting.

However, like most of the other reviewers here I must comment on the flaws.

I'll leave out all comment on the grammar and italics except to say that I can forgive grammar errors but the italics were annoying to me as well.

Now this next point isn't really a problem but I do feel the need to address it. This story is busy. There is a heck of a lot going on that in the first instance seems hard to relate to other stuff that's going on and in the end it takes a huge chunk of expositionary dialogue (well more correctly it's mostly monologue) by Enki to tie everything together in nice parcel. This would have been a major problem but it's handled quite well so doesn't create a sudden wall that impedes reading like exposition so often can. Still it would have been better to spread the exposition out a bit and not dumped it all on Enki. Huge chunks of explanation should be avoided where possible.

And finally a very minor issue - like the other british person to review I found the British character, who has clearly never lived in Britain no matter what he says, mildly annoying. for one it generally doesn't snow in Britain at Christmas. In fact snow is a thing that lasts a day or two then melts. Trust me I'm 33 years old and British. I remember only 3 white Christmases in my lifetime and two of those were merely technical (we had snow showers but it only stuck for an hour or so). He also doesn't speak like any british person I know.

Still it is worth reading. It's a very good story and even as it stands it is a more than decent novel but with a bit of editing it could have been brilliant.

I gather he's learned a lot from writing and publishing Pocket and I'm really looking forward to the sequel because he's a good storyteller and his technical execution can only improve...

When I started reading this book I wasn't sure what to make of it. I thought it was a children's book, something along the lines of the movie Clockstoppers. Then as it progressed I realized it was too deep to be a kids book. It is basically a book that kids can enjoy and parents can enjoy. I'd put it alongside Harry Potter (though not as good as that)in that it is a children's book that is too adult for some children, but adults can enjoy it.

I look forward to the next novel in the series as it is probably going to be even better. There are a few rough patches in here. Maybe a few bits of characterization and the really exposition heavy chapter in the middle that could have been re-worked. But I'd say this book is far above most of the fare on lulu, and as good or better than many things in the traditional print world. I would definitely recommend this novel for any SF fan.

I'll be completely honest - the story Mark Jeffrey sets forth is a brilliant one. That's right, the story.

The rest of the book is a bit iffy. The writing suffers from nearly one grammatical mistake per page, and at 200+ pages that's a lot to just pass. There's also a lot of "telling" you what's going on, rather than "showing" - and it makes it read more like a campfire story rather than one you can get engrossed in. Sometimes you can, sometimes you can't.

I'm anticipating the second book, which should be an improvement in style and substance.

On the whole this is a pretty good story, but there are a few problems that detract from being immersed in the world created.

Firstly the British character comes out with stuff that no British person would say. Maybe these inconsistencies wouldn't be noticed by most people not familiar with anyone from the UK, but as i am British myself they really start to get irritating after a while.

The other major problem (and it's a biggie) is that about 2/3rds of the way through the book there is a massive block of dialogue. This dialogue isn't really broken up and goes on for chapters and ends up sounding like a lecture. It really destroys the pacing of the book.

Other than those two things this book is quite good, and has some interesting ideas. If the author can fix the two problems outlined above then the next book should be better than good.

I bought this book because the preview sucked me in immediately. An opening line so good cannot be ignored. However, I found, as I was reading, that I was totally lost. Of course, this is not really my genre of choice, and given the book's success, I will assume the rest of the planet is significantly more aware of what is going on. Still, regardless of that, I thought the writing was well-crafted. The language was vivid and the characters defined. Good work!

Sorry.... far to weird for my tastes! couldnt get a grip of the preview... For sci fans its obviously better.

This seems thoroughly engaging at first glance. I see that you have been very successful and it is not difficult to imagine why. This is an intellectual fantasy.

I will say upfront that the book has its flaws, particularly of the editing variety. However, the story is so compelling that it clearly rises above these imperfections and is a great, fun, adventurous read. I highly recommend it, and am anxiously awaiting the sequels that I believe are to come.

This is an immediately enjoyable read, absorbing and full of those tiny mysteries that pull a reader to the next page.

Being a connoisseur of SciFi, loving the romantic works of SC Lewis, Bradbury, Stephenson and the likes, Mr. Jeffrey hits all of those intriguing, intense, and fantastic touch-points. His words, wit, and wisdom wrap your eyes in an undulating grip as you are compelled to keep ingesting till fully nourished. A powerful thrilling read that brings you back and forth through scientific theory, childhood, and the meaning of the universe. A truly satisfying work for adults, though suitable for teens, that you'll buy and read all in one day and hunger for Mr. Jeffrey's next works.