Lulu Marketplace

I read this story for free on his own website. Sadly amateurish. Original concept but very poorly executed at a basically 6th grade level, grammatically, syntactically, plot wise, and in every way that English 101 students are taught NOT to write. Poor user of dialog as far as moving the story along, tells you more than shows you regarding important concepts. Contains slave like forced marriages, which were deeply offensive. Also contains abundant transhumanism/transspecies references, which are deeply disturbing ethical issues and is strictly forbidden in biblical terms. As a biblically based Christian, I object to this authors clearly stated New Age worlddview as elucidated in this story. Even if you are not a christian, this story also fails on the literary level as being embarassingly amateurish, and so is a total waste of time to read, let alone pay for. My advice to this author is to sell book/script ideas and let someone else execute them.