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"REVIEW OF THE BOOK: TOMORROW"
From: Mrs. Florence Igenuma


Thank you for the opportunity to assist you by providing you with a critique of your work. As a fellow writer, I wish you the best in your writing career and I hope you find the information below helpful and useful.


Critique Section:



The Current Title – How catchy is it? How well does it convey the information in the manuscript?

The title, Tomorrow, appropriately informs the reader that the novella is relating to some future events probably reflected events from today.



The Current Synopsis – How catchy is it? Does it... More > intrigue?


The synopsis gives a nice overview of the write-up, and it’s quite catchy and also very appropriate.



The Current Length of the Work – Is it appropriate for the target market?


The manuscript is currently 82,855 words in length. This is a little too long but since there aren’t any unnecessary write ups in the book its ok.



What is the power of the opening 3-5 sentences?

Not necessarily fascinating, but appropriate for this kind of work.



The Main Character


“Niye” is a young female who is struggling and also has plans for a great Tomorrow but this starts breaking apart bit by bit.



Supporting Characters (if any)


Omo – Niye’s lover. He keeps Niye’s hopes alive, no matter what happens and no matter what it takes (even his life).

Jonathan – Antagonist. He is a very cruel being no feeling no mercy.

Rachael – Friend. Great friend but with no trust in her friend.


Dialogue (if any) – Describe and comment.

Dialogue is very appropriate and has a lot of fiction.



Mechanics – Spelling:

The author did a nice job here. There are none.


Mechanics – Punctuation:

There are no obvious punctuation errors.



Mechanics – Formatting:

Format is of industry standards.


Other:


It was a pleasure reading this manuscript. The author has done a great job.



Conclusion:


‘Tomorrow” is an excellent submission. It also is well written and the storyline is well paced. "Tomorrow" is one of the most fundamental pieces of literature I have picked up in a long time.





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